A gril who was sacred.

This morning we all completed our first Writing Sample for 2013.
I have posted it just as a wrote it just as I wrote it in the 40 minutes that we were given.


One day there was a  girl and boys called Mary and Luke and they were 19 and 9 they once live in a big huge house called the Dally House.The next morning Mary woke up and as soon she woke up Mary ran down the stair to see what she can make for her and Luke.After When Mary finish making the food  Luke woke up and came down with a smile face as he came down he told Mary he going to start school so they ate and when it was 8.30 am Mary made his lunch  and Luke went up stairs to get really for school.

When it was 9.00.am Mary went and drove Luke to school at fancier primary school.
When they  got there she wave goodbye and said I’ll come and pick you up at 3.00.pm so she went of home to get really to go shopping for there shoes so she went home and got really.Later some random person said open the door with a low voice so she went down stair  to open the door but when she got to the door she was sacred.

Because she saw a man holding something on his he so she ran and lock every door or a window that was open so she really wanted to go shopping for their shoes.
Lucky Because she had her phone with her  so she rang the police with tears on her face.