A gril who was sacred.

This morning we all completed our first Writing Sample for 2013.
I have posted it just as a wrote it just as I wrote it in the 40 minutes that we were given.


One day there was a  girl and boys called Mary and Luke and they were 19 and 9 they once live in a big huge house called the Dally House.The next morning Mary woke up and as soon she woke up Mary ran down the stair to see what she can make for her and Luke.After When Mary finish making the food  Luke woke up and came down with a smile face as he came down he told Mary he going to start school so they ate and when it was 8.30 am Mary made his lunch  and Luke went up stairs to get really for school.

When it was 9.00.am Mary went and drove Luke to school at fancier primary school.
When they  got there she wave goodbye and said I’ll come and pick you up at 3.00.pm so she went of home to get really to go shopping for there shoes so she went home and got really.Later some random person said open the door with a low voice so she went down stair  to open the door but when she got to the door she was sacred.

Because she saw a man holding something on his he so she ran and lock every door or a window that was open so she really wanted to go shopping for their shoes.
Lucky Because she had her phone with her  so she rang the police with tears on her face.  

This is what I need help with

This is somethingI would need to learn about.

This what I'm good at

This is movie that show you about what I am good at.

My Bio Peom

Eleva Nervous,Kind and shy person. Daughter of OLita and Mina. I am a sister of Sione, Meleane, Nolisi, Uluaki, Kaloni and Sateki.    Lover of my family,friends and sport. Excited when I hang out with my family.                   Have been to Kawau Island for three days. Scared of Ghost,Sharks and Rat. I want to go Back to Kawau Island.   Resident of Glen Innes. Tuipulotu.

My Holiday

During the holiday my family and I went to our cousin 21st At Tamaki College at 1.oo pm.When we started we first had to pray and then start.

Next we sang the happy birthday song and then  my uncle had to hand out the 21st   key.Later it was eat time but first we had to pray  again. When it was finish we ate,then I had to stood up and say a speech about when I first meet her.

During saying the speech I cry but it was all right but I was shy.When i finish I  ate and the food was nice.When it was finish she manage to get $900.35.



 

about me

This is a presentation about me and my family.

My learning Goal in the classroom this term is to improve my writing.  

To achieve my goal I need to make sure I reread my writing so that it makes good sense.